It’s, also, the darkest one I have written.
What a gut-wrenching story. Absolutely horrible.
Horrible was the target, so thank you. It’s the kindest thing you could have called it.
Your technique with pacing and sentence structure was perfect to portray the emotion (or rather lack thereof). The story hit me in the gut.
The lack thereof was the point. A man in that hour can't feel anything yet, so the sentences weren't allowed to either. Thank you, Jenni.
Oof, that last line really tells you all you need. Well done.
It's the only safety feature in the whole thing, and it protects no one. Thank you, Siobhan.
Heartbreaking; in both the detail and what's left unsaid.
The use of shorter sentences, of small observations, of broken fragments really emphasises the impact of the event. It really cuts deep.
Thank you for sharing this 🖤
The unsaid was the only part I trusted. Anything I stated outright went soft, so I cut it. The emptiness in those eyes was already the story. Thank you for the prompt.
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What a gut-wrenching story. Absolutely horrible.
Horrible was the target, so thank you. It’s the kindest thing you could have called it.
Your technique with pacing and sentence structure was perfect to portray the emotion (or rather lack thereof). The story hit me in the gut.
The lack thereof was the point. A man in that hour can't feel anything yet, so the sentences weren't allowed to either. Thank you, Jenni.
Oof, that last line really tells you all you need. Well done.
It's the only safety feature in the whole thing, and it protects no one. Thank you, Siobhan.
Heartbreaking; in both the detail and what's left unsaid.
The use of shorter sentences, of small observations, of broken fragments really emphasises the impact of the event. It really cuts deep.
Thank you for sharing this 🖤
The unsaid was the only part I trusted. Anything I stated outright went soft, so I cut it. The emptiness in those eyes was already the story. Thank you for the prompt.
🖤